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Joined: May 2011 Posts: 1,642 Location: District 9 Karma: 72 |  | Chase Ivashkov D12 « Thread Started on Sept 17, 2011, 5:06am » | |
Name: Chase Ivashkov Age: 18 Gender: Male District/Area: District 12 Appearance: Chase has blonde hair, hair he takes great care in styling everyday to be stylishly messy. He has emerald green eyes that are a light with mischief and humour. Chase has a well muscled body, but is quite pale. He is really thin, but it doesn’t affect him, he is just naturally thin. Chase is very tall around two meters in height. Chases flaw is he has six fingers on one hand it looks pretty weird, but kind of cool, you can hardly tell, but when you do your like "huh" confused and stuff "what that can't be right" and of course you then go count them again.
Chase doesn’t like to wear shoes and prefers to be bare foot; he likes to wear singlets and prefers them over anything else. Chase dislikes pants. A lot; I mean he will wear them if he has to, but he prefers shorts. Shorts that are not short and show, his pasty white thighs, that would just be wrong. Ugh.
Personality: Chase is a really fun guy to be around, he can be very random and is very compulsive when he does thing. He calls it "instinct" but, of course we all know it's not. Chase has a very short attention span and will randomly change topics, so be warned don't get freaked out when this happens.
Chase is really flirty; he loves to flirt a lot with females. He can be quite offensive when he's in the mood. Chase has a tendency to say random things, you can be in the middle of a conversation and he will just say something random. Chase is never serious; I mean it is really rare if he is ever truly serious.
Chase doesn’t have many friends, people seem to like him, and then they don't. This upsets him a lot and he is really cautious with people, unless they are female and are very pretty. Chase is basically known as a 'Party Boy Prince.' Chase as also very well known for being very stubborn, he believes he’s right even when he is wrong.
History: A long time ago, Chase had a brother, his name was Aiden, he is no longer his brother. Well, he still is except he's dead. It was a cold night, colder than usual in autumn for the district 12 residence, Chase walked beside his brother down the gloomy streets of district 12. With every breath frost floated up towards the sky. They were huddled in their clothing, for once Chase was wearing pants; his brother wore the same clothing. You couldn't tell the difference between the two. That's what went wrong.
He had come out of nowhere, a guy, he leapt for Adien, and Chase watched not understanding what was happening, he watched, he did nothing as his brother was stabbed. Chase hadn't seen the knife, maybe if he had of, maybe he would have done something. It was all over in seconds, the guy, who Chase had realised was a "friend" from school, ran off down the street. Chase... Chase didn't know what to do. People say that was the day Chase lost it. People say that was the day Chase went crazy.
Chase regrets that day, he loved his brother, he never forgave himself; the grief drove him nuts. It killed chase on the inside. He never was the same. Aiden was everything to Chase, he was the only family Chase had and he was gone. Chase wants to die, but what would be the point? He punishes himself for Aiden’s death by living; every day brings new pain and sorrow. He really misses Aiden. Chase lives life these days by drinking, and partying, he has no money and drinks with a homemade concoction. The alcohol kills the pain. You will never find Chase sober. Sometimes he goes on about stuff, things he could have done better or changed, he mumbles away to himself. People try to avoid him, Chase lives his life through alcohol and being drunk. Chase gets his alcohol from a homemade concoction, its not really alcohol, but more of this random stuff that is really strong. It could also be possibly killing him, he dosen't know.
Codeword: ODAIR Comments/Other: Life is punishment, for our wrongs.
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Joined: May 2011 Gender: Female  Posts: 3,188 Karma: 75 |  | Re: Chase Ivashkov D12 « Reply #1 on Sept 18, 2011, 10:07pm » | |
A very sad story,all around D: The thoughts here are good, Cass, but some of the writing makes it tricky to understand. There's lot of run-ons, for instance, and you sometimes you don't capitalize Chase's name, which makes things difficult, since it could be a verb or a noun otherwise.
Anyhow, be sure to run this through a spell and grammar check. Also I'd love to see more in the history section about Chase's life currently, beyond just missing Adrian.
Post back when you've made the changes ^^
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Joined: May 2011 Posts: 1,642 Location: District 9 Karma: 72 |  | Re: Chase Ivashkov D12 « Reply #2 on Sept 19, 2011, 6:51pm » | |
Sorry Kay:)
When I did it I was so tired, I had just got back from soccer... and I reckon you don't really care:) yeah so, anyway I fixed it. Just let me know if there is anything else and then I shall fix it again:) Thanks again.
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Joined: May 2011 Gender: Female  Posts: 3,188 Karma: 75 |  | Re: Chase Ivashkov D12 « Reply #3 on Sept 19, 2011, 11:20pm » | |
I totes understand being tired! I tend to replace words with other unrelated words when I'm tired, so I'll end up with sentences like: The elephant sang the ball... which makes no sense but somehow my brain allows my fingers to type.
Anyhoo, I just wanted to clarify a few quick things! First, is his brother's name Adrian or Aiden? You have both here.
Second, you need to come up with a justification for how he could get alcohol in District Twelve. While Haymitch had an unending supply of it, he was also a victor, and therefore wealthy. It would be difficult to come by, so I want to see some reasoning for this worked into the history.
Post a reply again when you're done ^^
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Joined: May 2011 Posts: 1,642 Location: District 9 Karma: 72 |  | Re: Chase Ivashkov D12 « Reply #4 on Sept 20, 2011, 6:15pm » | |
Sorry again,
Yeah it's meant to be Aiden, I don't know how the name changed, but yeah. I fixed it.
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Joined: May 2011 Gender: Female  Posts: 3,188 Karma: 75 |  | Re: Chase Ivashkov D12 « Reply #5 on Sept 20, 2011, 6:59pm » | |
Much improved, thank you!
ACCEPTED!
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