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Joined: Jan 2012 Gender: Male  Posts: 19 Karma: 0 |  | Eeti Sechan DISTRICT 4 « Thread Started on Jan 20, 2012, 9:56pm » | |
Name: Eeti Sechan ( Stars ) Age: 15 Gender: Male District/Area: District 4 Appearance: Eeti is a short boy who is about 4-5 ft. tall. He has short, dirty-blond hair. His hair is curly, which he gets from his father.. He's somewhat tanned, with a-bit of pale skin, because Eeti doesn't get much sunlight, and mostly fishes in the shade. His eyes are a sea green coulor, which resemble his home district. He loves the color in them, because the sea is his home, and always will be. They're also his second favourite color, which is Sea G He has alot of freckles, mostly from spending all day fishing in the sun. He doesn't get much sleep, so normally he looks either tired, or bored.
He has a scar beside his eye from a fishing accident when he was younger. He has a bruise under his eye from another fishing accident, which had happened a few months back. His ears are somewhat medium sized, yet he can hear better than most kids age. His hair looks like a black/silver color in the moonlight, because the reflection partially darkens, and lightens his hair. He likes to wear black & white clothing, because his favourite thing is the stars and the night sky, and He gets called stars sometimes, mostly because he always dazes off into the stars. Personality: Eeti is a fun, energetic person who loves the outdoors. Sometimes he gets flared up, mostly when people try to pick fights. His favourite colours are black and white, because he loves the stars, and the night sky. Out of all of the seafood, Eeti loves squid. Eeti is most strongest in the sea/ocean, because that reminds him of home and who he is fighting for.
Eeti wishes he was smarter, but he believes brains aren't the key to life. Eeti also hates snow & cold weather, because it freezes the water and makes it difficult to fish. He doesn't resemble any fame, but many years back. He doesn't resemble any sadness, but lots of things can break him. If Eeti could do anything in the world, it'd be to kill the President of Panem, because of the cruelty he/she has brought to Panem.
Eeti takes weaponry classes around the time of the reaping, just incase he gets picked. His weapon of choice wold be Trident or a Large Hook, because he's been using them for fishing for years. Although Eeti lives near the sea/ocean, his favourite element would be Earth because he thinks its and interesting subject, and because Water doesn't provide most life in the world. Eeti's favourite season is summer, because when the water is cold he can always go for a short swim, and also because its much easier to catch fish in the Summer. Eeti dreams of winning the hunger games, because than he wouldn't be reaped again and he'd never have to worry again. History: When Eeti was younger, he really had no idea on what to do, except for learning. He wanted to be a scientist in district 3, but eventually when he got older, he realized his true goal was to win the Hunger Games. While he was following his new dreams, he realized his fishing supplies could be used as weapons, and began using Tridents, Harpoons, and Hooks on practice dummies.
When Eeti turned Seven, his parents got him harpoons. ever since then, his special weapon was a harpoon. His family wasn't the most poor, because his older brother ( Age 19 ) held fighting classes, which gave the family money, and Eeti something to train for.
On Eeti's tenth birthday, disaster struck. His brothers business got bought out, and they were losing money. Eeti decided to fish more often, so his family could get money. On one sunny day, Eeti caught a fish that was very wanted in the district. Eeti sold the fish, and earned much money for his family.
Two years later, in the present, Eeti is still fishing, and training alot. He tries to train more, but fishes while he has to. When he first watched the hunger games, he disliked them. Now, he can't wait to be a part in them. Codeword: odair Comments/Other: This took me awhile. ( You try writing this in a room full of distractions, and soup. )
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Joined: Nov 2008 Gender: Female  Posts: 1,447 Location: Regalia, Underland Karma: 93 |  | Re: Eeti Sechan DISTRICT 4 « Reply #1 on Jan 20, 2012, 11:22pm » | |
Hello, and welcome to the site! ^^ Eeti looks pretty good. I only see a couple of problems:
Quote:| He likes to wear black & white clothing, especially multicolour scarves & shirts. |
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Quote:| He doesn't resemble any fame, but many years back. |
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Quote:| after a year of fishing, he finally had gained the money to sign up for training classes. he was the youngest, yet one of the best people in the class. after the first year from that, he decided to start his own class to gain some money. with the money, he got weapons for his class, and eventually created a weapons training class. |
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The first sentence seems a tad contradictory, and the second is kind of confusing--I can't quite figure out what you mean. As for the paragraph, it doesn't seem entirely realistic to me to have a kid this young teaching classes, no matter how good he is. Having him be an assistant to his brother or something similar could make sense, depending on how much older his brother is, but I can't see him doing it on his own. Also, you have some capitalization issues; most of the time you're fine, but sometimes your sentences start with lowercase letters.
Clarify those bits and fix the capitalization, and I'll happily accept him! ^^
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Joined: Jan 2012 Gender: Male  Posts: 19 Karma: 0 |  | Re: Eeti Sechan DISTRICT 4 « Reply #2 on Jan 21, 2012, 1:11pm » | |
Jan 20, 2012, 11:22pm, Wolf Tears wrote:Hello, and welcome to the site! ^^ Eeti looks pretty good. I only see a couple of problems:
Quote:| He likes to wear black & white clothing, especially multicolour scarves & shirts. |
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Quote:| after a year of fishing, he finally had gained the money to sign up for training classes. he was the youngest, yet one of the best people in the class. after the first year from that, he decided to start his own class to gain some money. with the money, he got weapons for his class, and eventually created a weapons training class. |
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The first sentence seems a tad contradictory, and the second is kind of confusing--I can't quite figure out what you mean. As for the paragraph, it doesn't seem entirely realistic to me to have a kid this young teaching classes, no matter how good he is. Having him be an assistant to his brother or something similar could make sense, depending on how much older his brother is, but I can't see him doing it on his own. Also, you have some capitalization issues; most of the time you're fine, but sometimes your sentences start with lowercase letters.
Clarify those bits and fix the capitalization, and I'll happily accept him! ^^ |
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Is that better? (:
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accepted!
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