My NaNo Synopsis

So I was introduced to NaNo by Sky and during class I came up with this for my own story! I am basing it off my Halloween short story that some of you may have read. So just give me you opinions and sugjestions to make it the best it can be!! ;D

And here it is:

My name is Kirby Garcia. I am dead, I am alone, and I want revenge. They killed everything that was left inside of me. Every strand of hope, every drop of love. It’s all gone, leaving me with the hollow empty shell of myself. I’m barely even human anymore. I don’t have emotions, I don’t feel pain, and most of all I don’t ever get happy. I don’t even remember what that feels like anymore, to run and frolic. To laugh like a complete idiot, or to have fun. It just doesn’t happen and never will again. I was only eleven, a small little girl with dirt brown hair and dull gray eyes. Not even that pretty, really. But that dull face seems gorgeous now, compared to the monster that has taken the shape of my body…


My name it Teddy Moore. I am unstable, I am sick, and I want my mommy. Someone has taken me away from my loving family, and has hurt me until I think I might want to die. But I can’t die, yet. There are too many things I want to do, like meet Mickey Mouse, get married to Prince Charming, and eat a birthday cake taller than my house. The thought of never being able to do or attempt these things hurt my heart, like tiny needles. One needle pricking and poking my fragil organ isn’t too bad, but a million is more pain than a person can stand. I have never lost hope though, I know that one day my mommy will come and save me from these horrors. But if I do die before that, at least I can escape the pain and meet Jesus…


My name is Haze Dawson, and I know everything…

Thousands of girls are being kidnapped and tortured. I am one of them. The only difference between me and them, is our age and knowledge of the situations. They are eleven, and clueless. I am sixteen, and know exactly what this organization does and it’s goals. I also know that there is no escape, and that I will die.