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California "Cali" Summerland >D8< CB DONE~ Jan 20, 2014 0:28:55 GMT -5

Post by ᴥ on Jan 20, 2014 0:28:55 GMT -5

Cali Summerland
17
Female
Heterosexual
District 8
Codeword: ODAIR

>Appearance<
`Dark skinned
`Unruly black hair
`brown eyes
`expressive face
`Full, thick hair
`ruby colored lips
`crooked teeth
`medium/thin body
`sharp features
`defined face
`dark clothes
`heavy makeup

>Personality<
`Blunt
`No filter
`Says what's on her mind
`Lonely
`Dislikes those younger than her
`Hates Children
`Independent
`Has no intention of relationships
`Sarcastic
`Struggles in school
`Afraid of everything
`Overreacts
`At night has to have the lights on

>History<
`Parents gave her to grandmother
`Grandmother raises her
`Grandmother was afraid
`Taught Cali to be afraid
`Grandmother Passes
`Goes back to parents
`Parents grow annoyed at her behavior
`Try to force her to "face her fears"
`Cali breaks down
`Sent to live with a sister
`Detests her parents
`Sister is caring
`Helps her face her fears
`Writes a Diary daily filled with letters to her grandmother

Last Edit: Mar 16, 2014 4:54:49 GMT -5 by ᴥ

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California "Cali" Summerland >D8< CB DONE~ Jan 20, 2014 11:23:32 GMT -5

Post by Sunrise Rainier D2 // [Thundy] on Jan 20, 2014 11:23:32 GMT -5

Hi there! My only problem here is that she likely wouldn't be diagnosed with depression/anxiety because the Districts tend to lack the kind of medical care and knowledge to understand, well, most diseases and disorders. Could you remove this detail? Also, the fact that she hallucinates seeing her grandmother is highly implausible unless she's using drugs or the like that could cause hallucinations. Throwing mental illness at characters to make them more interesting (i.e. a depressed person having hallucinations) doesn't work unless you do the research to back it up, so remove that detail too, please?

Last Edit: Jan 20, 2014 11:25:46 GMT -5 by Sunrise Rainier D2 // [Thundy]

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California "Cali" Summerland >D8< CB DONE~ Jan 20, 2014 13:40:20 GMT -5

Post by ᴥ on Jan 20, 2014 13:40:20 GMT -5

I apologize for the atrocity that this bio was. I wrote it very late at night and was rushed. I wasn't thinking properly and just wrote what came to mind. I fixed it and hopefully this is more acceptable. Usually a lot of care and research goes into my characters and my carelessness is quite embarrassing.

Again I apologize

Last Edit: Jan 20, 2014 13:42:47 GMT -5 by ᴥ

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Sunrise Rainier D2 // [Thundy] Retired Staff 6,346 POSTS Pronouns: He/Him last seen Nov 17, 2023 15:15:56 GMT -5 cozy, queer af	California "Cali" Summerland >D8< CB DONE~ Jan 20, 2014 14:29:11 GMT -5 Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Sunrise Rainier D2 // [Thundy] on Jan 20, 2014 14:29:11 GMT -5 Whoops, I just realized that you're missing the codeword - could you add it in? (And no worries! It's not bad at all.)
	Last Edit: Jan 20, 2014 14:32:27 GMT -5 by Sunrise Rainier D2 // [Thundy] warehouse

ᴥ Head RP Tutor 4,550 POSTS Pronouns: he/him last seen May 5, 2024 2:29:11 GMT -5 oof	California "Cali" Summerland >D8< CB DONE~ Jan 20, 2014 14:42:59 GMT -5 Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by ᴥ on Jan 20, 2014 14:42:59 GMT -5 My bad!! All fixed now
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Sunrise Rainier D2 // [Thundy] Retired Staff 6,346 POSTS Pronouns: He/Him last seen Nov 17, 2023 15:15:56 GMT -5 cozy, queer af	California "Cali" Summerland >D8< CB DONE~ Jan 20, 2014 15:05:14 GMT -5 Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Sunrise Rainier D2 // [Thundy] on Jan 20, 2014 15:05:14 GMT -5 Accepted!
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