Bobby, District 4

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hat40
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Bobby, District 4 Apr 18, 2010 6:28:48 GMT -5

Post by hat40 on Apr 18, 2010 6:28:48 GMT -5

Name: Bob
Age: 12
Gender: Male
District/Area: District 4
Appearance:

Blue eyes, muscular, tall, blonde hair, big

Personality:

Aggresive, intelligent

History:

Has 2 brothers and 1 sister, the oldest of the group, works as a fisherman,

Codeword: mutans
Comments/Other:

Lulu
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Bobby, District 4 Apr 18, 2010 14:34:15 GMT -5

Post by Lulu on Apr 18, 2010 14:34:15 GMT -5

There's a few things wrong with this bio. First, the codeword is completely wrong, so you may need to go back and read the rules more carefully. Then you also need to add A LOT more details to appearance, personality, and history. We're looking for decent sized paragraphs here, ones that really tell us about your character. And third, they need to be in full sentences, and not just a list of things. If you fix these things, I can accept.

{lulu's cast}

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