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Post by Deleted on Oct 7, 2016 16:18:12 GMT -5

Aviary Neutrix

My name is Aviary. Many people compare me to birds, because I'm flying to tree to tree, my feet dancing with the wind. My brown hair is mostly let loose, but during formal occasions, its in a bun. My lips are naturally red, and they show people that I'm not an normal person, I am unique. My eyes are oval, and they are the most beautiful color. Chocolate Brown. Its my favorite color in the whole wide world.

My body is slim, but my legs and arms are full of muscle. I use my leg muscle, to jump to tree to tree usually gaining little muscle every time I jump from and to the trees. I usually wear clothes that are hand-me downs from my brothers and sisters. They are usually ragged and have stains on them. I have fast hands, and I can work quick.

I have a scar that Is just ghastly, from me jumping to a tree, and I fell on a sharp stick, and It cut me right on my cheek, leaving a scar that I just want to go away. I was purple for a while, and now its just red and just sits their and doesn't bleed, but it irritates the crap out of my skin. I weigh about, 190 lbs, pretty big for my age, most people are about 100 lbs, I think. I'm really tall for my age to, I'm 6'1, so I'm pretty tall.
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I'm nice, but odd in some ways. I love odd smells, like some chemicals, just smell really good to me. I'm nice, because I feel like being mean gets you no place in life. I want to be a bird enthusiast, and show people around district 7, and show them the different kind of birds. I will tell them about it, and I would want them someday to show other people the ways of birds, and kinds of birds.

I personally don't think I have flaws, but that's not what my brothers and sisters say. My sister, Cedara, says that I'm meddlesome and nosey. I do get into peoples business, but that's just to help them in anyway I can. So I don't think that is a flaw.

I am meddlesome though, I can agree with that. I like to take things into my own hands, and sometimes it was a huge mistake to do so. I know that some day It will be my downfall in something. It may be the cause of my death, It may be the cause of my glory. Who knows. But I know one thing. It'll do something to my life that I will love or regret.
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I was born to two lumber workers, who have too many kids than they should have. 7 to be exact. We never have enough to eat. Everyday we switch who eats, and who doesn't eat. 3 of us don't eat a night, and the other four get to eat. It's the only way we've been able to hold together and survive with what little we have. My parents always said that I was connected to nature, connected to birds. They said they saw a flock of birds flying, and then something clicked in my mothers mind, and they named me Aviary.

My parents left me outside when I was to young to go to school. They knew that I wouldn't wander off, because every time they came home I was playing with the birds, and trying to climb tree's and fly with them. I never flew in the air, but I jumped gracefully, and it felt like I was flying. I studied plants when I was little also, having my brothers and sisters telling me which one's were poisonous and which ones were edible. I recorded them in a journal my parents managed to get.

At five years old, my parents had another child, Cedara. She was smart beyond her years. A child genius. Good at like everything. I got jealous of her, because she knew how do do things I didn't know how to do. It just irked me. That's when I felt like being mean to Cedara wasn't going to make me smarter, or good at anything, except being a bad person. I just stuck with her, and learned with her.

At 7 years old, I began school. I did good in my classes, not exceptional, but I did good. I got A's and B's, nothing under that. I usually spent my time outside after school. Playing with birds, singing with them, hoping to be one of them when I grew up. At that age, I thought of it as possible, when I reach 17 years old, I will know it's impossible. 8, 9, and 10 years old were the boring years, nothing happy or terribly sad happened during those years.

At 12, is when I started getting scared of the world. The Reaping. It scared me to death, thinking I would get chosen. Thinking my brothers or sisters will get chosen. None of us did get chosen. So it calmed knowing that there will be like 1000 more names in the bowl than ours. More years like the boring years came. 15 is when It officially stopped. That's when I got my scar, It impacted on how I felt about being in public places. So I tried not to go to public events, but I was never excused from the reaping. Never.

16 years old was my flourishing year. I felt better about myself. I was more confident in myself than ever. I felt like I was the queen of the world. It felt amazing the be like that. I knew that I would never feel sad or mad again. Boy was I wrong. I still got mad and sad, but the emotions were more calm, than just bursting out without any explanation. 17 is where my story begins to head to a halt. 17 is when I was at the height of my confidence, so I'm at the climax in my life. Its about to be a falling action, so I'm waiting for it to come. I'm waiting everyday for the falling action to just come into my life, to destroy or to make it flourish more.

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Post by sbeeg on Oct 14, 2016 17:05:42 GMT -5

Hey there Fuzzy,

In her appearance she says she's 5'11" and 113 lbs and big for her age. The average female at 5'11" is about 136-170lbs. Please adjust her weight accordingly, or explain why she is so thin and why she thinks she's "big for her age."

Also, please put her district in the subject line of the thread.

Once this has been changed post again and we'll take another look.
Thanks^^
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Post by sbeeg on Oct 16, 2016 19:37:15 GMT -5

Hey there, thank you applying the edits.

I see you made her a weight that is more normal for her height. However, you made her still very light weight wise and still say others are all smaller than her. Why does she say she's bigger than everyone? Is it because she's taller than them or is self conscious of her weight? Please elaborate on this further.

If you have any questions let me know. Please post in this thread with the edit has been made.
Thanks,
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Post by анзие (Anz) on Nov 8, 2016 9:48:15 GMT -5

Heya--

Thank you for making the edits! I'm still a little bit uncertain as to why she associates being 190lbs with being bigger than the other girls - to my understanding, women who stand at about 6'1 on average fall anywhere between 166lbs and 202lbs - so she's well within the appropriate range. As Geebs mentioned above, is she self-conscious because she's taller/heavier? It would help if you gave a little insight on this topic into her mind :)

Post below when you've made the edits!