Taske Neron District 9
Sept 12, 2010 17:08:21 GMT -5
Post by Prince Inigo on Sept 12, 2010 17:08:21 GMT -5
Hello there. ^^
We need more information in all sections, as per the standard two paragraphs in Appearance and three in Personality and History each. A paragraph, here, is five sentences, at least.
There are some grammatical mistakes and spelling errors to clean up on that are pretty easy to spot. Ex. 'sole' is no the same as 'soul'... unless 'sole' is referring to your foot. o.O
An 9-year old would not be able to handle themselves well just instantly. Provide some kind of back story if you're going to try this; and, even then, Panem would put her to child services, as it's not proper for a 9-year old to be under no one's care.
The codeword is off by a few letters. Think back on the books; and, if you get it right, an image will pop up.
Reply back when you have made changes.
We need more information in all sections, as per the standard two paragraphs in Appearance and three in Personality and History each. A paragraph, here, is five sentences, at least.
There are some grammatical mistakes and spelling errors to clean up on that are pretty easy to spot. Ex. 'sole' is no the same as 'soul'... unless 'sole' is referring to your foot. o.O
An 9-year old would not be able to handle themselves well just instantly. Provide some kind of back story if you're going to try this; and, even then, Panem would put her to child services, as it's not proper for a 9-year old to be under no one's care.
The codeword is off by a few letters. Think back on the books; and, if you get it right, an image will pop up.
Reply back when you have made changes.
