Myles Tsjura District 4

Heya! Welcome to the site. I need you to fix a few things before I can accept him.

1) You do realize the number of inches in a foot, yeah? 4'12" is equivalent to 5 feet. So I would put "5 feet tall" rather than 4'12", because that doesn't even make sense. xD

2) It makes sense that he is quick and agile because of his relatively small size, but acrobatic and gymnastic feats? Even people with average strength have trouble accomplishing those kinds of things, and you said that he isn't very strong. I get that it wouldn't be difficult to lift himself because of his weight, but I would just take out that part about acrobatic and gymnastic feats, because it doesn't seem plausible unless you make him a bit stronger. It's unlikely that he would have much muscle at all at that height and weight, and it's more likely that he would be pretty weak.

3) I need you add more detail to your paragraphs in his appearance. This might be difficult, but please try, because your paragraphs are too short. Just think: Why is he kind of tan? Why is he so thin? Etc.

4) I kind of have a problem with the fact that he can jump through trees. Not only does it seem like you're copying from the book, but he lives in District 4, not District 11. It would make more sense if he lived in District 11, but he doesn't even barely need such a skill where he lives, let alone the fact that there probably aren't a whole ton of fruit-bearing trees scattered about?

5) "He gathers various fruits other agricultural products native to District 4, since he is able to leap through trees to collect the exotic fruits." District 4 people are fisherman; they aren't like the people of District 11, who work in orchards/fields/etc. harvesting fruits and other foods. At his age it's likely that he would already be fishing and working with his family (that is, anyone else in his family that is of the age to work) and it doesn't even make sense why he would be leaping around in the trees for fruit that shouldn't be there in the first place.

6) He needs some flaws in his personality, because there doesn't seem to be anything wrong with him. He's fun, amusing, tenacious, etc., yeah, but what is wrong with him other than the fact that he can be pessimistic? Everyone has faults, and I'd like to know what his are. Being pessimistic when times get tough doesn't really count; everyone is likely to have their bad days.

7) It would be really cool if you would explain some of his personality traits, because they seem random. Okay, he cares for nature and life. What caused this? Think about this for his other traits too, not just that one.

8) "An exceptional strategist, he is very smart and intuitive." It's beginning to seem that he's good at everything. Like I said before, he needs some flaws, but you also need to be careful with the redeeming traits that you do use, because you can have too many of them. It seems a bit too far-fetched to be realistic. He can be smart, but amazing at strategy? It's a bit much.

9) "He is skilled with throwing knives, even making them poiseness by using his surrounding reasources. He is very reasourceful, evn making his own style of knives that can be concealed in his sleeves." I have quite a few problems with this: a) He's 12. He should be frolicking around with friends and family and maybe working some, not practicing throwing dangerous poisonous objects? b) Why does he even NEED to know how to throw knives in the first place?! c) He makes them poisonous..? That's also a bit much. I'd like you to get rid of that bit of information entirely or justify it well enough that it makes sense. Without poison.

10) In his history, you'll have to remove the first few paragraphs and basically start anew, because as I've said before, he shouldn't be going around the District searching for fruit. It isn't realistic, and he should be working with his father a lot of the time. If you're looking for something else to write about, maybe talk about his family in more detail? School? Any close friends that he has? History is a very wide topic, you can basically talk about anything that has to do with his past. xD

11) You have a lot of misspelled words throughout this whole application. Could you copy and paste this into a Word document or something to help you detect any spelling errors? xD

12) Do you have the codeword? It doesn't even seem as if you've attempted to find it in the rules. Go find the codeword and then put it in the little box that asks for it. xD

I think that is about it. Post here when you're finished editing!