Mia Epona Popovic District Six

Hi there, welcome to the site. I need you to fix the following things before I can accept your character:

1) "Her long eyelashes take eyes away from her scars." Mkay. Eyelashes aren't distracting enough to direct someone's attention away from scars. I'm sorry, but if someone has a big ugly scar, I'm not going to be noticing his or her wonderfully long eyelashes.

2) "Mia is both Skinny and fat, she has been called fat by several people , but keeps her anorexic side away. (Well she tries)" That sentence doesn't make much sense at all, so please explain it more.

3) "Her brunnette hair is useally in a braid down her back for, Katniss Everdeen , her rolemodel, always wore it like that." Did you not read the rules? This site is a prequel to the series. Katniss doesn't exist, so there's no way that she could possibly be your character's role model.

4) "Her scars vary different sizes, from 2 inches , minimum, to 9 inches, maximum so far.She has one scar on her face, arm, thigh, leg, wrist, finger and stomach. " ...Umm, how exactly is it that she got these scars?

5) "She is a smart little girl and weants to be in The Hunger Games."
I'm going to direct you to THIS thread. Please read #8 on that list. I find that sentence to be a contradiction. A SMART person WANTING to be in the Games? No.

6) "She is fantastic with a dagger, sword and most importantly her Bow 'n' arrow." Please read #23 on that same list.

7) You don't seem to have the minimum number of paragraphs. The minimum is 2 for appearance, 3 for personality, and 3 for history. You have the minimum for appearance, but not for personality and history.

8) "She had to go secretly hunting and kept Katniss Everdeen in mind, for she was her rolemodel." I have so many problems with that sentence. Again, Katniss Everdeen doesn't exist at that point. What really bothers me this time around is that she is somehow magically able to handle weapons? What? Plus, her father is still alive at that point? If her father is still healthy and probably working, why does she even need to hunt in the first place? Or, even better, why doesn't she get a realistic job to help make money?

9) "She went into the wood every day and got a couple of things for her mother." Please remove the parts about illegal hunting, because it isn't plausible in her situation.

10) "Mia did the same things ,but one day his heart stopped. I quickly revived him licke Finnick revived Peeta. Her Father is still dearly sick but is better." Not only did you randomly switch from third person to first person, but Finnick and Peeta shouldn't exist either. Also, how is it that she knew how to revive him?

11) It would be nice if you would copy this application and put it into a Word document or something and check for misspelled words, because you have quite a few of them.

12) You're missing several letters from the codeword.

I think that's it. Post here when you're done revising it and I will come check it again.

There are still a few things that you need to fix.

1) "A flaw she has with her personality is that she is silent when she isn't suppose to talk but talkative when she can talk." That sentence doesn't make sense at all. She shuts up when she needs to and she only talks when it's appropriate to talk? How exactly is that a flaw? I'm assuming that you accidentally worded it wrong, but you need to fix it. xD

2) "Mia practices archery by herself, but her father helps sometimes if he feels good enough." Mmm as I said before, no weapons.

3) "Mias’ neighbors come over a lot to have dinner." The apostrophe should go before the s, not after. You made that mistakes in a few places.

4) Could you please put a space between each paragraph for organizational purposes?

Post here when you're done editing.

You didn't edit the first few things that I asked for you to edit. Please make sure that you fix those few things, because I can't accept your character until you do.