The Meta (Wanderer)

agentmaine
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Let the bodies hit the floor...

The Meta (Wanderer) Nov 25, 2010 13:42:44 GMT -5

Post by agentmaine on Nov 25, 2010 13:42:44 GMT -5

Name: Meta
Age: Unknown, possibly 16
Gender: Male
District/Area: Wanderer
Appearance:

Tall and covered in power armor. His armor is mostly white, with brown shoulder pads. He wears an astronaut-esque helmet with an orange visor. The Meta is very bulky and can withstand a mild amount of pain. He carrys a grenade launcher with a blade tied to the back and a magnum pistol.

Personality:

The Meta is cruel, ruthless, and dangerous. He never speaks, save for the menacing growls and roars that come from behind his helmet. He is prone to bouts of anger when severely annoyed. He kills anyone in his path and will stop at nothing until he attains his ultimate goal. However, what this goal is remains to be seen.

History:

The Meta's full history is unknown. Some say he was once a contestant in the Hunger Games that turned savage. Others say he is a muttation gone rouge, taking it's revenge against the Capitol. Whatever the case, everyone agrees he was once human. The Meta's name is whispered with fear by those who have heard or known about him. If you ever meet him, here's some advice: Run. Fast.

Codeword: Oda
Comments/Other:

The Meta is actually a character from the internet series Red Vs Blue. Here's what he looks like: images2.fanpop.com/images/photos/2900000/Luke-McKay-Draws-The-Meta-red-vs-blue-2946607-375-500.jpg

I do not own the picture featured in this link.

Last Edit: Nov 25, 2010 16:29:43 GMT -5 by agentmaine

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I go "Grawr!" =)

The Meta (Wanderer) Nov 25, 2010 17:05:48 GMT -5

Post by ᕙʕ•ᴥ•ʔᕗ on Nov 25, 2010 17:05:48 GMT -5

Okay, let's begin this review.

First off, as a general critique, this bio does not meet the paragraph requirements needed for the bio. Please regard #2 from Aya's Bio Self-Guide to see the requirements.

Next, the appearance. It is completely unrealistic. Where did this power armour come from? And the helmet? Also, the only information I was able to gleen from this section is that he's a big guy. What about his hair? His eyes? Even if he is covered with all that material, I would much rather know what he looks like on the inside as well. Realistically, he cannot always wear that without being noticed and as a Wanderer it is advisable that attention not be drawn. Another thing is the weapons. Obtaining weapons is very difficult, especially one with the complexity of the weapon(s) you listed. So let's try to be a bit more realistic with this section and give a little more description on who he is.

A roar behind his helmet is, while amusing, ridiculous. From what I understand, this guy's just a ball of fury. Unfortunately for you, no one is ever just a ball of fury; it makes them a flat character. We like having rounded characters, characters that are three-dimensional. It adds more to the character and gives you much more material to work with. You might also want to explain why he's so angry at the time (if the information is in the history, then just give a brief explanation).

His history gave me no information. I understand he can be mysterious and all that, but there has to be some history in there. How did this fear spread? How did he become a Wanderer? A little more detail would be good (and help you with meeting the minimum bio requirements.

The codeword is incorrect. I advise you look through the rules again. If the codeword is correct, an image would appear in your bio saying that it is correct. Just a hint.

If the image shows what your character actually looks like, I'm sorry but that's going to be impossible. A character who looks like that is bound to catch the attention; there is no way he could blend in with all of that on him.

Please fix your character application and respond back when you have.

^credit to Shrimp

char info yayy

agentmaine
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Let the bodies hit the floor...

The Meta (Wanderer) Nov 25, 2010 17:58:56 GMT -5

Post by agentmaine on Nov 25, 2010 17:58:56 GMT -5

I clearly stated he's from a popular internet show. The guy's basically the Predator on steroids. And wearing power armor. He dosen't have emotions: He's a semi-mindless killing machine, for god's sake.

Sorry If I was rude, but that's the point of what I'm saying.

Last Edit: Nov 25, 2010 18:07:32 GMT -5 by agentmaine

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The Meta (Wanderer) Nov 25, 2010 18:17:22 GMT -5

Post by ᕙʕ•ᴥ•ʔᕗ on Nov 25, 2010 18:17:22 GMT -5

Right. And my point is that this is a Hunger Games RP site. That means you have to think in terms of the Hunger Games. Even if he's from a popular internet show, it does not relate to the Hunger Games so I cannot accept you character. I'm going to emphasise this once: This is a Hunger Games RPG. That means all characters are human. No supernatural wacky thing going on.

Also, you still need to meet the bio requirements. It does not matter what your character is like, you still need to have write 2 paragraphs for the appearance, three for personality, and three for history.

Respond back when you have edited the application.

^credit to Shrimp

char info yayy