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pinkydude500 Seam Resident 1 POSTS last seen Dec 23, 2010 14:37:42 GMT -5	william #12 Dec 23, 2010 14:37:41 GMT -5 Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by pinkydude500 on Dec 23, 2010 14:37:41 GMT -5 Name: ian Age: 15 Gender: Male District/Area: District 12 Appearance: strong smart tall but slow Personality: nice but not easly trick History: family runs butcher shop Codeword: odr Comments/Other:

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william #12 Dec 23, 2010 15:12:41 GMT -5

Post by shrimp on Dec 23, 2010 15:12:41 GMT -5

{{shrimpeh!:

Hey Pinky Dude,

Please look at the Bio-Self Check Guide to understand what you must do in order to get... William or Ian (which one is it?) accepted. Your sections are much too short - we require 2 paragraphs for appearance, 3 paragraphs for Personality and 3 paragraphs for History.

There is not enough information in this biography to understand what Will/Ian is like. Phunke's Beginner Bio Guide will help you determine what to add to this biography.

With personality, he only has 2 traits. Nice, and not easily tricked. On this site, we consider characters with no flaws, and only positive characteristics to be Mary-Sues/Gary-Stus. Please read Luna's Guide to Mary Sues/Gary Stus to understand how to add more depth to Ian. For a shorter, slightly simplified version, you can read Phunke's Guide. Oh, and smart would fall under the personality category, not appearance.

Your codeword is incorrect. If the codeword is correct, a little picture that says "codeword correct" will appear when you modify the bio/post the bio.

Please make the changes and another staff member or myself will get back to you ^^

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