Drina Sinclaire District Twelve.

I just had to put this in:

If you're going to use song lyrics, make sure they don't appear longer than the bio. The bio is the most important part, not the song lyrics. Therefore, either 1) make your bio sections longer or 2) get rid of some lyrics.

Mks, let's go through this.

Appearance:
First off, I noticed that your character's FC is Alexandra Daddario. Ms. Daddario is a 25-year-old woman. That's a twelve year difference between your character's age and her age. She even had a difficult time convincing PJO fans that she could play a 16-year-old. I ask you to reconsider the relationship between this FC's age and your character's age.

For an appearance section told first person by a blind girl, I have to say that this is pretty good.


Personality:

Hahaha undyingly loyal... Sort of.

Care to explain what she means by saying "sort of"?

Just some friendly advice.

Why would she provide friendly advice? She's a private person who is sarcastic and keeps to herself. So why would she be giving friendly advice?


History:

when she was 2. (When I was 6.)

Or you could just say that he left when Drina was six. I don't really understand the necessity to use her sister's age and then put in Drina's age.

I found out that I'm a bit of an abnormality when I was 5 and at school everyone asked why I couldn't see.

I'm pretty sure she would have known that she was blind at that point, and also known that she was an "abnormality". The rest of her family can see, right?

I need to be myself. Not a lable. Not a pity story. ME.

What label? And how does her being a "ME" make her not a pity story? Not a label? Clarification would be nice.


Also, credit the song if you're going to use it to that extent. It's a courteous thing to do.

Anywho, reply when you're finished.

...I still want you to explain the first one. >.>

So does she assume that everyone can't see? Did she never ask how it was possible that her family could tell her what they were seeing? Or did they just not say anything?

You also didn't respond to the age issue, tyvm.

Well, until you can find those pics, I'm just going to have to leave it as is. She looks at least 16-18 in the pics you provided.

Yeah, I don't get it.

I still find it difficult/unrealistic to believe that she wouldn't know that others were not blind until she was 5. Young children pick up on a lot of things (and they don't even need the sight to do it).