Rebecca Black, District 2

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Rebecca Black
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Rebecca Black, District 2 May 6, 2011 16:42:14 GMT -5

Post by Rebecca Black on May 6, 2011 16:42:14 GMT -5

Name: Rebecca Black, Nicknamed Becca
Age: 13 years old
Gender: Female
District/Area: District 2
Appearance:

Becca has short black hair, cropped to a subtle A-line. Her skin is tan, and she doesn't burn easily. She isn't thin, but not fat either, just right. She's roughly 5' 10", tall for her age, and weighs 122 pounds.

She usually wears a black tank top and skinny jeans, but sometimes she wears longer, flowing shirts. Rarely, only to reapings and funerals, she will wear a beautiful dress that is a deep blue fading into white at the hem. It has a single small star stitched on for every person that dies in her family, and it currently only has one for her father.

Personality:

Becca is a fighter, but she loves little kids. She has two little brothers, and loves them to bits. She loves her throwing knives, they were a gift from her father. She is also a hunter, so she sneaks around often.

Becca never gets along with people, though secretly she wants to not be in charge, she wants to be loved instead of give love. Her life has always been a mess, and she wants to get married and relax.

Becca also can overuse her throwing knives, once she ended up killing a baby fox because she thought it was attacking a bird, and when she found out it wasn't she cried for days. And days. She doesn't know why she's so good with the throwing knives, but anything one handed is nearly impossible for her to work with. She can handle bow and arrow almost as well as her knives, but she finds her knives easier to carry around.

History:

Becca grew up until she was 8 with both her parents, until her father died. Her mother became a druggie, and Becca fell in charge. Her little brothers Alex and Ryan are twins, and they completely think she is their mother. She told them their real mother is their aunt, to protect them.

She works as a healer, one of the few left in her district. She isn't a fan of modern medicines, since they failed to save her father, so she uses herbs found around the city.

Her life is a horrible mess now, but her father used to be the best hunter and the best healer in the town. When he had to start mining, he wasn't physically capable, and he fell down the shaft, becoming severely injured. Modern medicines, of course, failed to save him.

Codeword: oDair
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Last Edit: May 6, 2011 17:09:49 GMT -5 by Rebecca Black

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Rebecca Black, District 2 May 7, 2011 1:46:37 GMT -5

Post by Prince Inigo on May 7, 2011 1:46:37 GMT -5

Hey there. Welcome to the site. ^^

Overall, please add more detail in all the sections. We want five decently-sized sentences per each paragraph minimum, and the paragraphs here look short because of the small sentences.

She isn't thin, but not fat either, just right. She's roughly 5' 10", tall for her age, and weighs 122 pounds.

According to the BMI, she is slightly underweight, so I don't know what would be considered 'just right' for this situation. Perhaps take out that generalization? She would probably be on the thinner side to to that height-to-weight ratio, though.

Other than the detail needed, I would love for you to explain in better detail about the dress and the stars. It sounds like a cool concept, and I would like to know how this idea came to be for Rebecca.

I'm sorry, but I would not be able to accept hunting for this character and family unless there is a much better History for this lifestyle. She would not need to, because she's in a Career District. She has ample opportunities for training, and hunting would not be as needed for her. Hunting, in general, is not for any District, with the exception of District 9 when we still had hunting for their industry.

Becca also can overuse her throwing knives, once she ended up killing a baby fox because she thought it was attacking a bird, and when she found out it wasn't she cried for days.

I assume this would be outside the District borders? Escaping out of Districts is a bit harder for District 2, I assume, since Peacekeeper training is considered a secret. Other than that, how would she eventually know that the baby fox wasn't trying to kill the bird?

Healing in the Districts wouldn't be big, huge hospitals. Just mentioning. It's not that big of a business in District 2 because they deal with stone quarries and Peacekeeper training. Of course, I can accept the healing/doctor/apothecary thing, to an extent, but just know that it probably wasn't that much of a business.

Her life is a horrible mess now, but her father used to be the best hunter and the best healer in the town. When he had to start mining, he wasn't physically capable, and he fell down the shaft, becoming severely injured.

Again, hunting is probably a no.

Please modify your application with the necessary changes and reply to the thread to state that you need another review. Thanks! If you have questions, you can ask them in your reply. :)