Emily Odair (district 12)

Hello, hungergames. ^^

This entire application needs to have more detail and sentences. We ask for two paragraphs for Appearance and three each for Personality and History (five decently-sized sentences to a paragraph). This gives enough necessary information to everyone that you RP with.

You also need to write the sentences in complete form. I also notice lots of mistakes throughout the application, and it would help to run the entire thing through a word document, in order to correct grammar and spelling errors. (It would also be nice for you to reread everything for clarity).

For Appearance, what is her figure and face look like? The face isn't just composed of colors of hair and eyes and length hair. There are different noses, shapes of eyes, other qualities of hair (cleaniness, shininess, texture, etc.) and more; and, since you're not using a FC, it would help everyone to give a good description of the character from your mind.

The same thing could be said for Personality too. There is just more to it than naming off personality trait; there are extremities and middle ground for each of them. Where does she lie in these extremities? As described as 'good', what is qualified as 'good' behavior? Does she respect her parents and friends, or does she have a more pleasing air despite not always following rules? Human personality is a very complex matter that should be delved into.

Finally, the History needs more description - as does everything else - but, unless you make the character really good, I can't accept the hunting thing. Yes, I know Katniss and Gale did this and were in District 12, but we can't have Katniss's and Gale's on this site. What I mean by this is that we don't generally accept hunters in District 12. If we did, we would have no miners, basically. This also means that, realistically, your character should not be able to know so many weapons, considering that District 12 is not a career District. She would have no need for that knowledge, as she would grow up to be in the mining business or a small essential business (ex. apothecary or food store).

Modify your application with the necessary changes and reply to the thread stating that you're ready for another crack at it. Thanks! If you have any questions, you can post them in the reply post.