selina and distict 1

Okay, you've got a solid foundation, but this needs a lot more work before I can accept her.

First off, I need more detail on everything. Site minimums are two paragraphs for appearance, three paragraphs for personality, and three paragraphs for history. Keep in mind that a paragraph is considered to be five or more good, well-constructed sentences (“Bob is tall,” “Jane likes pizza,” “Steve is not nice,” etc., don’t count).

I need you to give her some appearance flaws, just one or two are fine. Stringy hair, smelly feet, warts, acne, dry skin, the possibilities are literally endless. Keep in mind that scars do not count as flaws unless they’re particularly grotesque. A “flawless” character isn’t likely to exist unless they’re in the Capitol, and requiring physical flaws helps us avoid Mary-Sues/Gary-Stus. Hair that changes color isn't realistic, so that needs to change, and while some eyes change shades (blue to blue-green, etc.), changing entire colors isn't really possible, so either give more detail on that or take it out.

Her personality contradicts itself a bit.

She is mean when you get on her bad side but sometimes with her family she is nice excepte some of her brothers and some of her flaws are and cant resiste blonds and red heads and some times black heads and she loves people who give her stuff

Arguably, every single human being in the world is mean when you get on their bad side. So is she a mostly malicious person, or is she mostly benevolent? If you could clarify this, I’d appreciate it!

More detail on the personality! This is the most important part of your bio because it really gives the description of who your character is at their core. Put as much detail here as you possibly can; there’s nothing too insignificant! Think about why she is the way she is (this usually becomes evident in the history section) and go as deep into her head as you can!

I need some personality flaws. Being attracted to people and liking when people give you things aren't flaws, they're inherent human tendencies. Dig a little deeper. Anger issues? Phobias? Mental illness/disorder? Don’t be afraid to mess her up a little! The more flawed a character is, the more interesting they are. If you have a character that is super-nice and everyone loves them: the end, they’re kind of boring and depth-less. Really deepen her personality and make it interesting!

Really expand on her history! Go into deep detail about her relationships with family and friends, and examine how her past has affected her as a person. Generally the personality and history sections of a bio are very heavily dependent on each other, so reference both of these sections at once! Right now, all you're really telling us is basic information: where she lives, who's in her family, and really, even that isn't very coherent. Go into detail!

Additionally, you've got a lot of spelling and grammatical errors in here. Make sure you fix those!

Here are some examples of good bios that should help you understand what I'm looking for:

• Jacklyn Garnet by South
  
• Marian Fletcher by Elegant
  
• Valencia "Bang Bang" Harlow by Lalia

Please make the requested changes (click the "modify" button in the top right hand corner of your post to change it) and then post back here when you’re done, and I’ll have another look at her!