Taylor Ray District 12

Name: Taylor Ray
Age: 13
Gender: Female
District/Area: District 12
Appearance:
Taylor wasn't very tall, nor well fed. That was average for a seam girl. However, her eyes weren't grey. They happened to be a glowing green. Her mother always told her it was her best feature. Besides that, she had flowing dark brown hair. It stopped at her shoulder, and it was always down. She could not stand for it to be up, it felt like one more tiny bit of herself was being yanked away. Her face was clear as day and it always seemed that it held a smile, even if it is fake at times. However her face still held true emotion, even if only in her eyes.
Taylor was somewhat tiny. Not very big in stature. This helped her running, she always wins in school races. She can also go quite a while without food which could be a part of the reason she is so small. Taylor is not the strongest, but don't judge her by her cover. She will surprise you.
Taylor doesn't own the best clothing. It is covered in coal dust that floats in the atmosphere. She always wears leather boots, tennis shoes seem to not give her the feeling of security. Security matters so much for Taylor. It makes her feel safe.
Personality:
Taylor isn't loud, outstanding, or perfect. At most she will speak her mind on occasions. She is very kind hearted and can not deal with others being in pain. It sends chills up her spine. To most people Taylor is frightened. Really, she is caring, even though fear could show, who isn't afraid in a world like this.
Taylor also is somewhat courageous. She will stand up for others, unfortunatley, only to a point. She underestimates herself, which at times, may be good for her. She often seems to get herself into messes she can't handle. She isn't Miss. I can do anything! But, it can come off that way.
Taylor, overall, is hopeful. Through everything, she can easily light up ones day. She has an optimistic side which is needed with the messes she can cause. It sometimes seems as if there is light inside of her that only few can get to come to the outside. Taylor likes to stay bottled up, it feels secure.
Taylor Ray is also quite intelligent. Her mind seems to find a bigger picture. She can easily solve issues that are to complex for others. This makes her seem partially show offish, but she is proud of her mind. It can be what keeps her down to earth when others are in panic. Although, Taylor does have her weak points when it comes to her loved ones. She will pick her heart over her brain any day, so it may seem as if Taylor loses human instinct at times.
History:
Taylor was born the year of the 55th games. Her favorite season is spring. It feels fresh and reviving,hopeful even. Her parents, Willow and Trector Ray love her dearly. Each and everyday they tell Taylor that she is their sunflower. She aqquired this nickname because of how hopeful and inviting she is to her parents. She would never dissapoint them, espiecially after her brother died.
Her brother, Travis, died in a coal mine accident. She remembered being let out of school and running to the east mine. The ashen streets filled with tearful eyes and sobbing people. She hoped for her brother to come up. So glad that she didn't hear the blow. Whatever kind words people said to her, she knocked them off. Her brother protected her, loved her, was everything to her. Now she was waiting to see if he died. And turns out, he did. She ran from the place. Hid, sobbing, behind a building. She doesn't remember much else, besides her mom taking her home and putting her to bed.
Taylor went to school daily. She was smart so her parents made sure of keeping her that way. Her parents thought the one thing Taylor had left after her brother died was her smarts. Her mom and dad felt ashamed, but they had cut her off once Travis died. Taylor practically relied on herself. She remembers talking to her mom after her brother had died. Her mom just sat bug eyed with an occasional tear strolling down her face. Taylor soon noticed and decided to just go take a walk to the bakery. At least the towns people could shoot her sympathetic looks.
Other than that, during her toddler years her dad had started teaching her to paint. She is a beautiful artist and captures vivid images onto her canvas. She can't afford anything real, but she makes do. Sometimes, she only paints with mud. Other than painting, Taylor is somewhat handy with a pick ax. Her family owns one, and she has spent plenty of time fiddling with it. Shes learned to throw it very well at targets. That all started when she flung it away realizing her brother may have died with a pick ax in his hand. This intimidates some people, but Taylor couldn't harm a fly.
Taylor could not harm a fly, but she can harm herself. Throwing a pick ax around isn't the smartest idea. She was trying to run and fling it into her target, but instead she almost fell on top of it. You could hear her screech as she went down. Instead of receiving her death, she recieved a small scratch. However, mentally she was scarred. She still has her talent with the pick ax but rarely picks one up.
Later on when Taylor was twelve, even after her terrible life of losing her brother at age 10, and being left practically alone, Taylor's father died. He had caught a disease and the "doctor" had said there was nothing they could do. Taylor had really shut down inside when she heard the news. Whatever light was on the inside of her, was temporarily gone. About a week later she came to realization that she needed to be strong for her father and spend as much time with her father as she could. The last thing Taylor heard from her father was," I love you sunflower, be good." Taylor didn't cry, she had soft, teary, painful eyes. The only kind that show extreme pain.
Now days, Taylor spends her time focusing on school. She no longer paints. All of her images seem dark and ominous, not spirited and happy. She is still retrieving her mother from the hollowness that appears as her. She sometimes finds herself to be an empty shell. She tells herself that she must keep going. She doesn't know why. She only knows that there must be some reason, maybe to save another little girls life and make sure that little girl doesn't enter the hunger games. So far, that prediction has yet to come true. However, you may have predicted that Taylor would grow up to fast, and she did.


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