Colton Smit - District 5 [FINISHED] | Hunger Games: The RPG

Hael [prev. reasons] Merchant 154 POSTS last seen Feb 19, 2014 21:58:51 GMT -5 Life is just soo interesting right now	Colton Smit - District 5 [FINISHED] Aug 16, 2013 16:09:36 GMT -5 Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Hael [prev. reasons] on Aug 16, 2013 16:09:36 GMT -5 Name: Colton Alexander Smit Age: 18 Gender: Male District/Area: District 5 Appearance: Personality: History: Codeword: odair Comments/Other:
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Life is just soo interesting right now

Colton Smit - District 5 [FINISHED] Aug 16, 2013 18:22:39 GMT -5

Post by Hael [prev. reasons] on Aug 16, 2013 18:22:39 GMT -5

[ Name ]
Colton Smit
[ Gender ]
Male
[ Age ]
18
[ District ]
Five
[ Sexuality ]
Straight

Imagine you are girl hiding in a forest in the dark of night. The wind shakes the leafs in the trees around you. An owl hoots in the distance and the wind grazes your skin, running shivers up your back. You take a step forward and accidentally step on a twig. You step back at the sound of it snapping, hoping no one heard you. You're not supposed to be here and you know it, someone else does too. The sound of someone running gets closer and closer. You want to run, but something is stopping you. After turning around, you find cerulean blue eyes staring back at you. The blue stands out against the darkness, and the burning desire to run away slowly melts. In the back of your head, you know you should run, but the desire to stay is stronger. You hear heavy breaths as the person -- young man, or guy, you assume -- tries to catch their breath. Your eyes finally start adjusting to the darkness and you see that it most definitely is a guy. He looks about eighteen, you guess. He looks about Five feet and Eleven inches, and probably weighs 170 pounds. You aren't certain, though. He has short, straight sandy blonde hair, golden skin and defined muscles. He seems vaguely familiar. "You shouldn't be out here," he says in a baritone voice. His breathing has lowed down to normal breathing. But he's so close that he can feel him breathing on you. "Says you!" You shoot back, annoyed that he thinks he can tell you what to do. He doesn't even know your name! Sure, he is good looking, but it really annoys you when someone treats you like that."Calm down, we can get out of this together," he whispers in your ear, as if someone was listening.
You open your mouth to disagree, but the words don't come out. This is your favorite place to be, so you didn't want to leave, even though you shouldn't be here. At the same time, you didn't want him to leave either. You look down at his sturdy hands, almost wanting him to take hold of yours. You see scars on his hands, and half to hold yourself back from tracing them. You aren't usually like this, it's very odd behavior for you. Maybe it's the way he looks, or the the way he said that you were going to get out of this together. Or maybe it's the way it sounds just like those movies your great grandparents always talked about. Anyway, you know you were coming with him. He sees you staring and stalling, and his brow wrinkles into a frown. "Come on! You don't want to become an Avox, do you?" He broke into a run, and followed him as fast as your legs could take you.

You near to walls of district five, close enough that you can hear the electricity buzzing from the fence. He grabs your hand, leads you to a tree, and presses your back against it. "Be careful, you could have got caught." You nod slowly while biting your lip. "What's your name?" You finally ask, gazing into his eyes. "Colton," he replied. Your heart stops beating for a second and you gasp. You used to be friends with him when you were younger, but you grew apart as time wore on. Wow, puberty was really good to him. He brushes his soft lips against your forehead and takes a step back. He gives you a salute and it pains you to see him go. "Farewell, ____." You smile, remembering the way he always did that. It was the best night you had in a while.

[ FC ]
Lucas Till
[ Codeword ]
odair

Last Edit: Aug 16, 2013 18:56:35 GMT -5 by Hael [prev. reasons]

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Colton Smit - District 5 [FINISHED] Aug 16, 2013 21:18:36 GMT -5

Post by cass on Aug 16, 2013 21:18:36 GMT -5

Hey there! ^^ Welcome to the site!

So far you have done a fab job with Colton's bio, he is looking like a great character so far, but I'm going to need you to beef up those paragraphs just a little bit more! Remember that your bio must contain two paragraphs for appearance, three for history and three for personality. Try to keep in mind that a paragraph contains a minimum of five sentences per paragraph.

If you are struggling with trying to add more detail you could read lots and lots of amazing tutorials on how to help you out. HERE, is a fabulous guide on how to create a character. Elegant wrote this, and she used an amazing amount of detail that will help you to beef up those paragraphs you have! I seriously recommend reading that guide, it will give you a step by step breakdown of how to make a detailed, realistic character! Another great guide is THIS one by Thundy, she gives you some great tips of the biggest does and don'ts for your bio!

Another small issue as that the celebrity you have as the face claim for your character is already claimed! So you are going to need to look HERE to find a celebrity that no one else is using.

Okay, so try and beef up those lovely paragraphs just a little bit more! Once you have done that reply back here and another staff member will take a look. <3