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ac10771
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Braxton Miller District 4 Nov 15, 2013 23:21:12 GMT -5

Post by ac10771 on Nov 15, 2013 23:21:12 GMT -5

Name: Braxton Miller
Age: 14
Gender: Male
District/Area: District 4
Appearance:

5'2", with dirty blonde hair and blue eyes, rather big, kind of Like Thresh from the book

Personality:

Is a big smart with everyone. Can be loyal to certain people. He is rather strong but not a good runner. Can rough it rather well. He is slow so he can be out run in a foot race

History:

He was born into a wealthy family and received some training with the use of tridents and nets. Being trained was just one of the luxuries he had. After her caught his amount of fish for the day he would practice his spearing, so if he volunteered he could use a spear just as well. He practiced

Codeword: odar
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Last Edit: Nov 15, 2013 23:29:47 GMT -5 by ac10771

cass
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Braxton Miller District 4 Nov 16, 2013 22:30:22 GMT -5

Post by cass on Nov 16, 2013 22:30:22 GMT -5

Hey there, ac10771! It's great to see that you have had a go at making a character.

So far you have done a fab job with Braxton's's bio, he is looking like a great character so far, but I'm going to need you to beef up those paragraphs just a little bit more! Remember that your bio must contain two paragraphs for appearance, three for history and three for personality. Try to keep in mind that a paragraph contains a minimum of five sentences per paragraph.

If you are struggling with trying to add more detail you could read lots and lots of amazing tutorials on how to help you out. HERE, is a fabulous guide on how to create a character. Elegant wrote this, and she used an amazing amount of detail that will help you to beef up those paragraphs you have! I seriously recommend reading that guide, it will give you a step by step breakdown of how to make a detailed, realistic character! Another great guide is THIS one by Thundy, she gives you some great tips of the biggest does and don'ts for your bio!

Okay, so try and beef up those lovely paragraphs just a little bit more! Once you have done that reply back here and another staff member will take a look.

<3 Cass