slender // d10 // wip

Ghosty,

It's a fun idea to make a character based off of Slender Man, kudos to you, I often like to make characters based on myth as well. However, I don't believe it is a good idea to make a concise bio for such a character. (A concise bio can only be 300- words and you have 417.)

The problem is that I just don't understand what you're trying to get across in this bio. I get that he likes to kill people and from above I can eek out the fact that he killed his family, but how did he get away with it? Usually killing your entire family with a sole survivor ends in a pretty idiot-free suspect, aka 'the survivor'. I am going to need to know how your slender character got away with it, why he did it, what drove him to insanity, etc. (Maybe he was born insane? Describe his insanity to us maybe?) As well as the fact that if he did show signs of mental illness before the events of their death, it would be important to note that there is no way that he could walk away without being a suspect.

I would also appreciate a better description of what he looks like. It is important to this site that we stick to the human anatomy. A character such as this requires a more detailed appearance.

What I love to see most in a character is research and dedication to the individual story put in. I don't want to sound harsh, but I'd like to challenge you to look past the basic description of Slender Man and create your own, three-dimensional character.

Thanks,
Ele