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Linkin Scmitch | 4 Jul 11, 2015 10:48:22 GMT -5

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Name: Linkin Scmitch

Age: 14

Gender: Male

District: 4

Appearance:

Appearance Text: Blue Eyes, Charcoal Black Hair, Unknown Symbol On The Back Of His Right Hand (Originally it was on the cheek but that doesn't look right)

Personality: Dark

Personality Text: Caring For Team-mate's, Often Quite Rude, Mostly Angry

History: Meh

History Text: Wasn't Cared For Much, Bullied, Often Would Spend Afternoons By Crystal Clear Ponds Of Water

Codeword: oDair

Other: N/A
Flare360, Linkin plays Nico Mirallegro Newt (August 12)

Warning: This Is Not New! This Has Been Used In Many Variations! Like On The Everything-Roleplay Site! (One Of Your Affilaites) This May Be Used Multiple Times At Once!

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Linkin Scmitch | 4 Jul 11, 2015 11:22:56 GMT -5

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Post by flare360 on Jul 11, 2015 11:22:56 GMT -5

Linkin Scmitch

-(Hi, I'm the guy that made this character, Flare360! That's all i'm allowed to say, Bye! Hi, I'm Linkin's guardian! Alison Swift! I don't really think its fair on linkin if I filled it out for him, So I will let him do the talking! Also, It's worth mentioning he doesn't really like interacting, He's a bit of a bum sometimes! He wanted to do this, I'm quite happy for him doing it!) No I didn't mam (Ooops, My mistake! But he's doing this because it was his mothers death wish to fill out this form thing, I-) I DON'T WANNA GO INTO THE HUNGER GAMES MAM! (and there you go! I'm being accompanied by a person that holds the hunger games for this so... Enjoy ^~^)

-I Like To Consider Myself An "Average Person"... Tough I Am Quite The Opposite Of One, I'm a middle aged Tweenager to young Teenager, One of my prides is that tattoo I got on my hand, To this day I still feel emotion pumping trough it, I had to use the black for it sadly, didn't have enough money for the other colours, I'm still fond of it to this day, I don't know what it means but I like it!

-Another one of my prides is my hair, I don't care that its 31 inches and I don't care that's "Not Normal" I like it that way! (Linkin's a bit of a weird guy sometimes) HEY! I CAN BE AS ABNORMAL AS I WANT! (Ok jez fine) And don't you think I didn't see you didn't spell that correctly! Anyway It kinda annoys me sometimes, But when I put my hood down you need to be prepared to see glory!

-What? Oh your talking about those misc things, Like my ears, I got the ears because I donated to a fundraiser, My mom took me to it when I was 5! Tough It didn't succeed I got a pair anyway! They respond to your emotions! She was the best mom ever!

-Dude, If you even get STARTED on my persona your in for the long run... My persona comes for my love of all things dark, Tough I'm not Goth I am pretty dark, Its probably explained by my skin colour, Also you could say that it might come from something witch I don't wanna talk about right now, (Aw come on linkin tell us!) I just don't wanna talk OK! Get that camera out of my fa... *Static*

-Are You Sure This is a good idea? (Yes It Is!) Ok then... Another thing about my persona is actually surprising, I'm autistic, AND BEFORE YOU JUST GO OFF AND SAY SOMETHING STUPID! (Don't worry, Linkin can get emotional!) SHUT UP MAM! (Aright, Don't make me abandon you) as I was saying, I'm autistic, one of my symptoms is amplified emotions, I Have about 6 in total, (He can't remember right now -_-)

-The Final Part Of My persona is that, Well, Ok I just don't wanna do this! (Aw Please '~') NO! I AM NOT SHOWING MY SECRET! (DON'T MAKE ME ABANDON YOU!) ARIGHT! FINE! Urgh, The final fact is, That's it! I'M OUTTA HERE! (ARIGHT FINE! I'LL TELL THEM FOR YOU! Sorry Guys, He's a bit of a pain sometimes ^~^) (The final fact is he just doesn't like many things, Anything for that matter, He's just a loner, And that might be how he will stay!)

-GET OFF ME! (Not Until You Answer The 3 More Paragraphs Linkin!) ARIGHT! FINE! Since I Have To! Urgh, My history was horrible, My, REAL! parent's were killed in a fire, My mum was making my fav! Roast chicken with bread and fresh garlic leaves! Then... My dad poured chicken fat on the fire, I quickly grabbed my ears and ran off (He had glasses back then to ^~^) I was just trying to get away from the forest It's really sad... I wonder to this they what a childhood they would had given me, Worrying in fear what happened for me as they burned up into ashes! I ran away, Then I was found by my guardian Alison Swift! (That's Me ^~^) and she took me in! (Isn't he a cutie?) Thankfully

-(Don't worry linkin, 2 more to go!) Another thing is that I got bullied alot, even when I did my first backflip! I was bullied, EVEN WHEN I GOT THESE EARS! I WAS BULLIED! There's Nothing More to that side, I was the laughing stock. (Linkin, You Have To Make It Long!) Urgh, Fine! But Don't say you weren't in for the long run, The reason for all this was cause of my persona, Often I would just go and sit near the pond after class, Sometime's they would push me in, It was at that point I found I was right for district 4, My intense love of water, When I was getting away from the fire... (That's the one above!) They attempted to snatch them, I made a quick escape when I bumped into Alison Swift!

-(Final One Linkin! You Can Do It!) The Fi- NOPE! I'M NOT DOING! IT! (Aright then fine, But we run the risk of not making it!) I DON'T FUCKING CARE MAM! *Static*

-(Sorry about that, That didn't go as expected! Linkin is a nice boy, Please respect him, Thank you!)

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Linkin Scmitch | 4 Jul 11, 2015 11:52:29 GMT -5

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Post by Gamemaker Lauren Kinkade on Jul 11, 2015 11:52:29 GMT -5

Hi Flare!

Kay here to review your bio! Welcome to the site. ^^

As has been mentioned in the cbox, this bio is a bit short. We definitely need more in the appearance section. If you are going to use the image in your first post and the physical description you've offered, I think he needs to be moved to the Capitol where such modifications are more common. Alternatively, if this is all a costume (removable ears, red contacts, and all), then it could possibly be okay for him to stay in 4, but we'd prefer him in 1 or 2. You need to have a good explanation for how he came by these costume items.

What does "bred in captivity" mean? How can you contextualize this within the world of Panem? We need to see a lot more realism and grounding for this character. I do really like that he sits near a pond after class! That works very well.

Also, you oscillate between very close first and a cheerleader second person. This makes the bio confusing to read, especially by the end. Why is Linkin - your character - filling out a bio? We need some context for this.

Thank you for the codeword! Post a reply back when you've made the changes.

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Linkin Scmitch | 4 Jul 11, 2015 12:07:53 GMT -5

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Post by flare360 on Jul 11, 2015 12:07:53 GMT -5

Jul 11, 2015 11:52:29 GMT -5 Gamemaker Lauren Kinkade said:

Q1: As has been mentioned in the cbox, this bio is a bit short.

Q2: We definitely need more in the appearance section. If you are going to use the image in your first post and the physical description you've offered, I think he needs to be moved to the Capitol where such modifications are more common. Alternatively, if this is all a costume (removable ears, red contacts, and all), then it could possibly be okay for him to stay in 4, but we'd prefer him in 1 or 2. You need to have a good explanation for how he came by these costume items.

Q3: What does "bred in captivity" mean? How can you contextualize this within the world of Panem? We need to see a lot more realism and grounding for this character. I do really like that he sits near a pond after class! That works very well.

Q4:Also, you oscillate between very close first and a cheerleader second person. This makes the bio confusing to read, especially by the end. Why is Linkin - your character - filling out a bio? We need some context for this.

A1: I tryed to make it as long as I could, Sorry if it dissapoints you!

A2: Yes, This indeed a costume! I made modifications to fit that!

A3: I changed it from "Bred in captivity" to "Died in a fire", I hope that will do!

A4: I think I fixed that! Making the first bit introduce that "cheerleader"

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Linkin Scmitch | 4 Jul 11, 2015 14:46:02 GMT -5

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Post by Gamemaker Lauren Kinkade on Jul 11, 2015 14:46:02 GMT -5

Hi again Flare!

Good progress. Still need a few more things:

How did Linkin come to be at a fundraiser? How does he have enough money to afford this fundraiser (and the resultant costume)? Why on earth would anyone give him red contacts? This also doesn't match the image you listed. Also, Panem doesn't recognize Chinese. You can say it's a symbol, but please erase references to China.

For the future: if Linkin is reaped, he will be given a human FC. Just wanted to put that on your radar. ^^

Also, the frame of this interview still doesn't quite work for our format. Linkin can be being interviewed... but not by you. It still needs to be in character. Maybe he's talking to a school reporter? Try to work that in more logically here. Give us more details about the setting of this interview, why it's occurring, how Linkin is reacting to being interrogated by this other character.

As for the history, still need more details. How did he survive the fire that killed his parents? Who are his guardians now? In Panem, every child under 18 must have a legal guardian for the reaping.

Again post a reply when you've made the changes. ^^

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Linkin Scmitch | 4 Jul 11, 2015 18:01:13 GMT -5

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Post by flare360 on Jul 11, 2015 18:01:13 GMT -5

Jul 11, 2015 14:46:02 GMT -5 Gamemaker Lauren Kinkade said:

Q1: How did Linkin come to be at a fundraiser? How does he have enough money to afford this fundraiser (and the resultant costume)?

Q2: Why on earth would anyone give him red contacts?

Q3: Panem doesn't recognize Chinese. You can say it's a symbol, but please erase references to China.

P.S 1: For the future: if Linkin is reaped, he will be given a human FC. Just wanted to put that on your radar. ^^

Q4: the frame of this interview still doesn't quite work for our format. Linkin can be being interviewed... but not by you. It still needs to be in character. Maybe he's talking to a school reporter? Try to work that in more logically here.

Q5: Give us more details about the setting of this interview, why it's occurring, how Linkin is reacting to being interrogated by this other character.

Q6: How did he survive the fire that killed his parents?

Q7: Who are his guardians now? In Panem, every child under 18 must have a legal guardian for the reaping.

A1: Fixed that part, His (Real) Mom taked him to it!

A2: Again, His Mom Knew that his eyes were injured, She took action!

A3: Made It "I Don't Know What It Means" instead of "Its 1 of 21 ways to spell sword in Chinese!"

P.S 1: Thanks For The Heads Up!

A4: I made it so he's being interviewed, We don't know who interviewed him, But his guardian is there!

A5: I'm going to add that right after I finish this post! As for reactions, He doesn't like it very much...

A6: He ran away, Simple as that

A7: Again, Unknown...

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Linkin Scmitch | 4 Jul 11, 2015 18:46:23 GMT -5

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Post by Gamemaker Lauren Kinkade on Jul 11, 2015 18:46:23 GMT -5

Ayy, nearly there! Thank you for your patience. ^^

As grim suggested, it would be best to change the title of your thread to include: the character name and district.

Okay some of the edits work. Thank you for explaining that his mother took him to the fundraiser. I'm still not sure why she thought red contacts were a good idea... is this a necessary detail, especially since it doesn't match the image you've used?

You say that we don't know the interviewer, but we need to know. Tell us. Give us context. Be specific. As you're already editing for the setting/context of this interview, hopefully this will be a natural addition.

Also, you say that his guardian is present... but then you say that his guardian is unknown. This also needs to be an actual character for us to accept the bio. It can be an NPC (Not Played Character), like his aunt or a foster home parent, but it needs to be someone specific.

When he ran away, what happened? Did he immediately find his new guardian? Did he have any siblings? How has he been able to survive? This fire in theory occurred after the fundraiser (since it was his mother who got him the ears and contacts, correct?). In that case, how has he managed to hold onto these costume items over the years? Does he hide them? If he's bullied, wouldn't they have stolen them?

Lots to think about here but I feel that we're getting much closer. ^^ You know the drill!

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Linkin Scmitch | 4 Jul 12, 2015 7:08:39 GMT -5

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Post by flare360 on Jul 12, 2015 7:08:39 GMT -5

Jul 11, 2015 18:46:23 GMT -5 Gamemaker Lauren Kinkade said:

Q1: As grim suggested, it would be best to change the title of your thread to include: the character name and district.

Q2: Okay some of the edits work. Thank you for explaining that his mother took him to the fundraiser. I'm still not sure why she thought red contacts were a good idea... is this a necessary detail, especially since it doesn't match the image you've used?

Q3: You say that we don't know the interviewer, but we need to know. Tell us. Give us context. Be specific. As you're already editing for the setting/context of this interview, hopefully this will be a natural addition.

Q4: Also, you say that his guardian is present... but then you say that his guardian is unknown. This also needs to be an actual character for us to accept the bio. It can be an NPC (Not Played Character), like his aunt or a foster home parent, but it needs to be someone specific.

Q5: When he ran away, what happened? Did he immediately find his new guardian? Did he have any siblings? How has he been able to survive? This fire in theory occurred after the fundraiser (since it was his mother who got him the ears and contacts, correct?). In that case, how has he managed to hold onto these costume items over the years? Does he hide them? If he's bullied, wouldn't they have stolen them?

A1: Did Dat!

A2: Removed the contacts entirely!

A3: Made it someone that hosts the hunger games!

A4: Fixed That aswell! we now know her name! "Alison Swift"

A5: He grabbed his ears, Trying to just get away from the forest, Then Alison Swift took him in!

Thank you for all your help! I really appreciate it!

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Linkin Scmitch | 4 Jul 13, 2015 18:56:53 GMT -5

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Post by Gamemaker Lauren Kinkade on Jul 13, 2015 18:56:53 GMT -5

Hey Flare! Thank you SO much for looking for a face for Linkin! Unfortunately, Nico Mirallegro is already taken by another member. Be sure to check the whole list to be sure the next face you find is available: hungergamesrpg.com/thread/6581?page=1

And without further to do...

ACCEPTED!

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