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gamemaker artemie 🦉nyte
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mercedes santiago|fin. Jul 30, 2016 22:39:29 GMT -5

Post by gamemaker artemie 🦉nyte on Jul 30, 2016 22:39:29 GMT -5

Hey!! This is really great and I love how you've wrote this but for right now it's a bit bare. You're completely free to stray from the appearance/personality/history format as long as you keep the information in there. For right now this is more of a post than a bio- tell us more about Mercedes. How does she live her life? What is she like as a person? What are her interests? Just add a little more about Mercedes herself as well as her past, all we have right now is that one incident with her parents- what about before?

Feel free to pm me with any further questions, and reply to this post when you've made the changes. Thank you!

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mercedes santiago|fin. Aug 20, 2016 0:08:16 GMT -5

Post by Deleted on Aug 20, 2016 0:08:16 GMT -5

Hello @fuzzywuzzie,
Mercedes has quite the interesting bio! Since she's 16 and technically underage, she'll need a guardian of some sort to watch over her or else she'll be sent to the community home. If you could please add that to her bio and maybe edit some of the grammar, that'd be great. Thanks!
Saph

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mercedes santiago|fin. Aug 21, 2016 12:07:34 GMT -5

Post by Deleted on Aug 21, 2016 12:07:34 GMT -5

Hi @fuzzywuzzie,

Thanks for the edit! Just wondering, did her parents have a history of being manipulative towards each other or violent towards each other? It seems very sudden for her parents to commit suicide on her birthday with no warning or letting her see their bodies.

Saph