Nymphodora Pomery, District 11

Nymphadora Pomprey
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Nymphodora Pomery, District 11 Jul 12, 2011 14:13:25 GMT -5

Post by Nymphadora Pomprey on Jul 12, 2011 14:13:25 GMT -5

Appearance
I have wavy dark treacle brown, which is around mid back length. I always tie it up with an emerald green ribbon, so that it doesn't get in the way of my face. I have oval, ebony coloured eyes with dark long lashes. I have a round face with rosy cheeks which stand out against my dark skin. My nose is wide and slightly flat, while my lips are thin a long.

I am tall, around 5 foot 8 and have an athletic frame- with slight muscled legs to prove it. My shoulders are broad and neck, with a straight sure back to support them. My hands are worn and scared from working in the trees all the time- blisters often occur from where I hold onto tree bark all day long. I have a flat stomach and prominent hips because I don't eat a lot. I often wear tank tops, along with khaki green ¾ lengthened combats and to finish it all off- worn dusty coloured trainers.

Personality
I have a sour attitude- one where I am sarcastic and nasty with almost everything I say. I will often shout and scream about things that annoy me- like the games- before going off fuming. I often find myself in trouble at work with these random sharp out bursts. Which can be a problem if your as poor as I.

However, when I want to- I am nice. Nice being complementing someone. I never- well rarely- hug or show caring emotion towards anyone. This means I am a bit of a loser but, I don't care what people think of me. I see myself as an independent woman- who can sometimes get a bit too big for her own shoes.

I guess be a little bit of a hopeless romantic. Not that I show it anyway. I like to think of what my life would be like if I married Bob or Bill or Fred- I can get a bit day dreamy sometimes thinking of these things. Course, I've never had a boyfriend but I do have plenty of friends who are boys. They're nice enough- as friends anyway.

History
I was born 15 years ago in a little hovel somewhere in the place I call home- District 11. Nice place-, I guess if your a pig. I was the second child and the least wanted of me and my sister. My sister Gemma was always smarter, prettier and nicer than me. My parents never wanted me, I was an accident. And well you know- Abortion is expensive and dangerous here in District 11 but that's for another day.

Gemma, was doing well. Until of course she got reaped. I couldn't really understand why she'd been picked and not me. Anyway, she got far. Powerful- stronger than I thought but Death didn't miss her. Oh no, I watched as a boy from our own district gouge her eyes out menacingly. So my sister died and my parents were stuck with little old sulky me. They, themselves were lazy so it didn't help the situation we had been left in.

My sister Gemma was the one who worked to put bread on the table- with her gone, I was left to do it all. To my surprise- it was fun. I liked climbing in the trees to pick the ripe fruit. I liked how the sun kissed my head everyday for almost 3 hours. Course I had to fit it around school- but who needs school. However all the extra work was hard, and only now do I realize how Gemma must have felt being practically a slave for our parents.

Last Edit: Aug 24, 2011 7:34:07 GMT -5 by Nymphadora Pomprey

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Nymphodora Pomery, District 11 Jul 12, 2011 15:16:49 GMT -5

Post by shrimp on Jul 12, 2011 15:16:49 GMT -5

Hi Alice-Marie!

First, I would like to say that Nyphodora Pomery has a rather amazing awesome name. It is bawse :3

However, you do need to add more information to all three sections, because they're rather short - we require two paragraphs for appearance [which you have, but it's a bit shorter than what we tend to like with paragraphs. Try five sentences per paragraph], and three paragraphs each for personality and history.

Now, looking at the information in each paragraph:

In appearance, we tend not to talk about ethnicity in our bios - it really doesn't go together all that well, and it's must better to just describe what they look like rather than say "___ is asian/white/black/hispanic/etc." Everything else is alright. I'd just like some more information - how tall is she? How much does she weigh? What does she wear? Try using things like that to increase word count and description^^

There is also no Seam in District 11 - there is one in District 12 though.

For personality, I need more. You say that she is shy and has a temper and used to be happy and loud. You need more than that - people have loads of personality traits, and you can expand so much more on those personality traits that you have already given. Try thinking about how she acts around others - what does she say? What does she do? Any nervous habits? Expansion is good in personality, for it helps you develop your character, as well as help others understand what your character is like. That's one of the most important reasons as to why we make bios - not only does it help us, but it helps the people who we shall be roleplaying with.

With history, this doesn't reach the three-paragraph minimum. Try talking more about her life in general [talking about it chronologically always helps]. What happened when she was under 8 years old? What did Nyphodora feel like after Rosa died? How did she feel when she had to take care of her mother?

By the way, in District 11, it's more likely for the characters to be working with agriculture [crops like tomatoes, potatoes, etc.] rather than animals, because that's District 10's job.

You do have some spelling and grammatical mistakes in this bio, so if you could find some and fix them while you're expanding and creating, that would be wonderful - I won't not accept it just because there are grammatical/spelling errors, but it just helps people read it easier :3

Good Luck, Alice!

Last Edit: Jul 12, 2011 15:17:07 GMT -5 by shrimp

shrimp Retired Staff 1,953 POSTS Pronouns: he/his last seen Oct 19, 2020 18:16:41 GMT -5	Nymphodora Pomery, District 11 Aug 24, 2011 10:58:51 GMT -5 Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by shrimp on Aug 24, 2011 10:58:51 GMT -5 much better! Next time however, it would be best to reply once you've edited/finished your bio. I do know however that it was in pending applications, so you can pm a staff member to move it if that's the case^^